http://www.mangafish.net/choons/RSI6A.MP3

erm - should have added sum details lol

 

basically its hard techno/house. clocked @ 160bpm. might push the bpm down when i'm happy with it tho as 4 now i want to hear the tune @ the speed i would play it

thanx 4 ur comments guys. u've been a great help

Ok excuse my lack of technical terminology here lol. Im doin this as im listening to it... at 00:49 i think the way it progresses is a bit too sudden and undefined.... am up to 1:30 now has been a bit repetative with the bassline so far and sounding very flat and samey.... 2:24 this just seems too sudden for the break.. again not really defined imo, in the "breakdown" ur bassline overpowers anythin else goin on in it. At 4:00 it cuts into a higher pitched what ill describe as a cowbell sound this is good and moves a little bit away from the the flatness that i feel the tune has had so far although i still notice the underlying flat note is still there quieter tho, 4:24 that drum didnt sound right there like it was just put there without much thought, 5:36 same sounds comin in again... 6:00 that drum again i dont think fits quite right, 7:12 again same sound coming in... 7:36 i think it cuts off too harshly here.... 7:46 i dont think u need to bring in anythin extra here like you have done...

 

Now i feel like a bitch but you wanted my honest opinion and this is just my thoughts on it... someone may think different to me. All in all i think u have some good sounds bein played about with but i found the track itself a bit long and samey... like you have tried to make a long track but filled it with all the same stuff try takin the flatness out of it, also id say take a good minute off the length of it and then see what you can do with it there and try and get it sounding less samey, look at the arrangement a bit more and i think try to plan it a bit better... keep working with it though hun!!

cheers claire - the outtro is just a copy of the intro hence the little extra comming in when it wasnt nessisary. i didnt realise that it would sound like that until after i exported the wav. so it was top of my todo list (ie sorting it out)

 

thanx 4 ur comments - been a great help and u've been far from bitchy. (infact ur the 1st person (bar tommy) to actually comment on it. tis a bitch getting people to listen to my tunes)

Ur welcome hun, ill try to review whenever i can if u send me links to download ur tunes from!!

 

Keep at it tho... uv got the software sussed so not just work on gettin the sound u want from it!!

cheers.

 

tis a slow learning curve 4 me tho :'( painful as i have all these ideas and little way of expressing em

 

 

weird really as i picked up DJing sooo quickly as well

production is another league to djing mate, it will come.

 

just downloaded your tune, gonna have a listen in a minute

Mr_Happy said:

cheers.

 

tis a slow learning curve 4 me tho :'( painful as i have all these ideas and little way of expressing em

 

 

weird really as i picked up DJing sooo quickly as well

 

Liams right, production is waaaaaaaaaaaaaay off from learning to mix... itll take time, but u will get there... i know exactly how u feel with it but definately keep on learning!!

i'm deffo learning tho. theres a vast improvment between the 1st tune i posted on here and this 1