my 2nd effort at making a tune

[Tony P]

if anyone has a spare 5 minutes i'd appreciate some feedback on this track i've attempted to make.

Not sure what genre it would fall into (i guess it has more psy trance elements than any other, but still am unsure)

the vocals need to be touched up, as the music in parts seem to make the less clear.

please remember that it's only my 2nd attempt, but i'd appreciate some constructive criticism

 

click here to listen

 

thanks for your time

[djandrewmartin]

Hey buddy!

 

I like it man! very evil!

 

A little more kickdrum with a couple of whooshy sounds leading up to a bigger crescendo should see you on the right path in my opinion.

 

Nice one!

 

Andy.

 

www.djandrewmartin.tk

[Tony P]

cheers andy, just trying to get familiar with the software.

i know what you mean about the kick and whooshy sounds, i'll have a play about and see what i can do

 

thanks for the feedback and giving some time up to listen to it, means alot

[Digital Liquid]

Yo, tony dude - most impressed - what software/vsts did u use

 

Follows some honest ideas, typed as soon as they came into my head whilst listening - albeit quietly at work !!

 

Its very open , perhaps some more mid range fx in the back ground to fill it out a little – in the beginning anyway

 

I personally think the vocal should be down pitched by about 5 but, retain original speed – spice it up a little! – distortion ? – Break down all else to just the vocal, pick out a bit, then work on that extracted “section” of vocal sample, might be one word or perhaps, a part of a word. This can then be treated as a percussion sound, high hat, clap area, that sort of thing. It can then morph back to the word or phrase it came from.

 

There needs to be more structure; how does a normal chart track go =

 

Intro, verse, chorus, verse, chorus, mid8, chorus, finish

 

You know what I mean, think of the various sections, where they are and how they are going to lead to the next one.

 

I like the sounds, speed, and intention of the tune. For a first or second effort its blindingly good.

 

Really annoying point is that I could only listen, via the html page on your site, couldn’t save as !? – couldn’t see the length of the tune – how long ?

 

Filters on a track are always good…

 

Excellent overall

 

Steve

 

[Tony P]

thanks for that mate, i gotta rush to get some food b4 i get back to work at 2

 

i'll have a good read of your comments later, thanks again for giving some time up.

very kind of you

 

the track is about 8 minutes long i think (or just under)

 

i used acid pro and a few vsti's...like juno, albino and vanguard

[Chris Hawkes]

will check it out when i get home matey!

[Tony P]

cheers chris, nothing too exciting, but i'd appreciate your feedback mate.

 

 

just had a good read of your comments steve and i agree with everything you have said, i've actually moved onto another project now, but i'll try and apply them to that. i'll go back in a couple of weeks probably and re-vamp this track with your suggestions.

 

but i'm really pissed off with hearing it now....ha ha

time for a break from it i think

[Chris Hawkes]

good stuff tony! i really like the rhythm of the track when the hihats come in, got a good groove to it!

 

I think when we get our headsa together sometime towards the end of this month we should be able to come up with something cool!

[Tony P]

thanks chris

 

i'm looking forward to getting together mate

 

[Ian Cashman]

good stuff tony. good to see ya getting it together m8.

 

like the sample too! ('The Gift' by The Velvet Underground) Quality lil story!

[Guest]

this is great! its sounds alot like some of hard acid house / minimal acid tech tracks i have on vinyl

 

impressive stuff