my l8est offering - plz review

[Mr_Happy]

not sure what genre i'd put it in

 

its clocked @ 165bpm

 

its kinda nu nrg/hard housey but a bit techy as well. has an almost industrial techno bassline and a bit of a dnb back beat to it

 

its not as dark as my usual stuff but i wouldnt say it was bouncy either

 

http://www.mangafish.net/choons/tone_deaf3.wma

 

sorry its a wma not an mp3, but the mp3 encoder on this comp only does to wma's, should have encoded it on me other computer b4 copying it onto this 1 really

 

artist: MangaFish

title: Tone Deaf

[Mr_Happy]

ur reviews then???

[TomD]

have to say it doesn't really make me want to move very much. there's no real punch to it, the trancey-ish riff adds something but it's not really enough.

[Blink]

OK, firstly, it seemed to be distorting a bit, not sure if it was the crappy soundcard and headphones I was listening to it too, or if it was that the mix wa "too hot" (clipping), I think it was the latter. I like the intro, the percussion is hard, and the whole thing has a nice dark feel to it. The only crticisms I would have are that it is a bit one paced, and doesn't seem to go anywhere. I think you should bring the synth parts forward a bit in the mix, put in a few breaks and builds, and I, personally, wold have a change to a totally different riff at some point.

 

This may sound like harsh criticism, but if you look at it, all I am actually criticising is the mix, and the arrangement. If you made the mix less hot (something I still haven't figured out how to do in my mixes, but the post in the reason thread about mastering will make a good read), and just somewhere put in a "middle 16", which you will find most songs have a bit where they go off somewhere different for about 16 bars, then return back to the main hook, you could have a good, dark tune on your hands.

[Mr_Happy]

chears blink - thats exactly the sorta help i was after

 

i knew i didnt like it but i didnt know y - just needed some guiance

 

 

btw - the mix is too hot - still working out how to have the sound levels audiable without getting clipping, tis amazingly tricky. altho having said that there is deliberate distortion put into the bassline - i love that raw sound u get

[Simon_C1562626685]

i'll have a listen in a little while mate and let u know what i think.

[Mr_Happy]

chears m8

[jon_m]

not sure what genre i'd put it in

 

not hardhouse thats 4 sure its more like slow hardcore techno!!

[Simon_C1562626685]

Right, this is takin ages to download, lol. But i'll write this as i listen to it.

 

First off this is not the kind of style music i would generally listen to as i'm more a hard trance man

 

Kick is nice and hard, altho as was mentioned b4 does seem to be distorting a bit. I'm not overly keen on the percussion, it doesn't seem to have much of a flow to it (this is just personal opinion, maybe it comes from listening to too much hard trance, lol) Right, little trancy riff is nice, but maybe needs a little EQing work around the mid-high range. there are some nice FX in there. I'm not overly keen on the little out of tune bit @ about 3.11 into the tune. As was also mentioned earlier it is a bit one paced and also gets a bit repetetive. I like some of the synth work in the break just b4 the kick roll comes in.

Erm, it really does sound very messy when it kicks back in. I like the little vocal bits they have been done really well.

 

What i would suggest is try adding a few more FX, sweeps etc in there to add a little more interest, and also the little trancey riff in the build up seems a little dry, try adding a bit of reverb delay or a slight flange to it.

 

I'm by no means a good producer, but this is just what i would do to the tune.

[Mr_Happy]

I'm by no means a good producer, but this is just what i would do to the tune.

 

u dont need to be to have and idea where to take a tune or what to do with it

 

 

all input is greatly appretiated

[IAHH1562627749]

still pretty dark, hehe

 

i think the bass drum is a bit busy (maybe its the other bass drum - i think it might be playing at a slightly higher pitch, i'm a bit deaf at this kind of thing).

 

i reckon it would be easy to get into if u chopped out those extra bassy drums, possibly replacin em with something lighter (like a distorted shaker) or just leaving them out altogether

 

its been a while since i've listened to techno, so bear in mind my comments are coming from a house/trance/hardcore perspective.

 

i mite just have to stick my techno tunes up here now ;-)

[Mr_Happy]

iamhardhouse said:

i mite just have to stick my techno tunes up here now ;-)

 

plz do - i'd love to hear em

 

 

as 4 ur comments - thanx alot

 

it was a v experamental tune, and if i'm honnet i dont think it works myself - but theres some good bits in there (imo) that would have potential to work as a tune